The first time I got lucky I saw red:
A flash of satin tied up in a bow.
As I tried to slip her dress up Brenda said,
“Honey, that’s as far as you can go.”
That glimpse ensured the next date my hands wandered;
Her peachy bum was cheese-wired by a thong.
She pulled away; my chance was all but squandered.
I had to know where I was going wrong.
“A ring!” she whispered, coyly leaning in,
That deep V spurred me to take action quicker.
The diamond matched her wishes and my grin
How I dreamed of swimming in silk and lacy knickers!
Grey years now stretch out like pants upon a line
but with a flash of pink each anniversary time.
Jennifer Stakes studied Medieval History at Edinburgh and Bristol Universities and now lives in Washington DC. She has managed to find some decent tea but misses Jaffa Cakes.
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13 Responses to “BRENDA'S KNICKERS • by Jennifer Stakes”
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December 14th, 2009 at 6:21 am
Cute – and LOL funny! I wanted it to go on a bit longer.
December 14th, 2009 at 7:14 am
Salute to Freedom of the Press! Keep the politics coming!
December 14th, 2009 at 10:19 am
Funny. Lovely. Great.
December 14th, 2009 at 10:31 am
We don’t even know if they had a good time at the movie together or even if they like the same movies. A good story has a beginning, middle, and end but in this one nothing happens.
December 14th, 2009 at 1:33 pm
Lovely funny poem, Jen! We knew everything we needed to know about the pair, from the transitions you described, right through to the grey pants on the line. Terrific!
December 14th, 2009 at 3:13 pm
I love it!! Great rhymes, good story, good laugh! Wonderful. I love the grey pants!
December 14th, 2009 at 4:51 pm
Nothing happens, Roberta??? Think of the flash of pink at every anniversay… Great fun and very enjoyable.
December 14th, 2009 at 5:16 pm
Thanks everyone for voting and commenting. I hope you liked a bit of silliness for a Monday.
December 14th, 2009 at 6:10 pm
I reread it
more enjoyable the second time….HHmmmmmmmmmm?
Perhaps that could have been mentioned ???
Liked it just as it is !!
5*****
December 14th, 2009 at 9:10 pm
Loved the humour,(which was) tinged with regret!
December 14th, 2009 at 10:14 pm
Funny and sweet, good one
December 15th, 2009 at 7:04 am
It’s just that thoughts don’t wander anywhere but the typical ones of the town of Meccabebbe. And the funniness so typically sweet with a grin right down to the bone:
“The diamond matched her wishes and my grin
How I dreamed of swimming in silk and lacy knickers!
Grey years now stretch out like pants upon a line”
December 18th, 2009 at 7:14 am
Really good.
I too think of thongs as cheese wire – don’t know why some women wear them!