Comments on: JOHNNY APPLESEED • by PSC http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/ Thu, 09 Sep 2010 14:16:49 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2667 Roberta SchulbergGoro Sat, 13 Jun 2009 14:59:29 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2667 I noticed that too. There is no point to a critique without a lot of honesty. You are just very sensitive to a slighting someone else might feel - in this case the writer of the poem. No, I wasn't hurt at all, so don't be perturbed about it. I merely wanted to correct the matter. In other words, my critique was that the poem was so well written that the reader suffers the poet's lamented community detachment along with the writer of the "scattered" pennings long in the working, struggled over, which might never be read and if they are, the writer may never personally know who any of the readers are. Not knowing or being part of one's own community is called "alienation" and when that happens it causes much psychological suffering on the part of the alienated. I hope you remain as sensitive to others as you give evidence of being, and you will never know the scattering of your jewels. I noticed that too. There is no point to a critique without a lot of honesty. You are just very sensitive to a slighting someone else might feel – in this case the writer of the poem. No, I wasn’t hurt at all, so don’t be perturbed about it. I merely wanted to correct the matter. In other words, my critique was that the poem was so well written that the reader suffers the poet’s lamented community detachment along with the writer of the “scattered” pennings long in the working, struggled over, which might never be read and if they are, the writer may never personally know who any of the readers are. Not knowing or being part of one’s own community is called “alienation” and when that happens it causes much psychological suffering on the part of the alienated. I hope you remain as sensitive to others as you give evidence of being, and you will never know the scattering of your jewels.

]]> By: Amy Corbin http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2661 Amy Corbin Fri, 12 Jun 2009 22:21:20 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2661 You are welcome, Roberta. I'm sorry if I in any way hurt your feelings -- taking your words the wrong way. I appreciate your honesty when commenting, but for me there's no point in honesty without a little critique to follow, so that there is growth. You are welcome, Roberta. I’m sorry if I in any way hurt your feelings — taking your words the wrong way. I appreciate your honesty when commenting, but for me there’s no point in honesty without a little critique to follow, so that there is growth.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2658 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 12 Jun 2009 20:02:02 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2658 In internet comments writing is often hasty. I thought the topic would be obvious perceived by readers as a description by the poem of something extremely regrettable. I guess that was my presumption. If I realized it, I would give a short synopsis of my reading of the poem, to explain my comment. Thank you for your considerate comment to me. In internet comments writing is often hasty. I thought the topic would be obvious perceived by readers as a description by the poem of something extremely regrettable. I guess that was my presumption. If I realized it, I would give a short synopsis of my reading of the poem, to explain my comment. Thank you for your considerate comment to me.

]]> By: Amy Corbin http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2657 Amy Corbin Fri, 12 Jun 2009 15:40:34 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2657 My apologies to you, Roberta. I took your words out of context. This is easy to do on the internet--without inflection, laughter, intonation or nuance. Please forgive me for misinterpreting your comments. Next time I will ask you to explain yourself first. My apologies to you, Roberta. I took your words out of context. This is easy to do on the internet–without inflection, laughter, intonation or nuance. Please forgive me for misinterpreting your comments. Next time I will ask you to explain yourself first.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2656 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 12 Jun 2009 15:30:28 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2656 Alienation is a horrible thing. Alienation is a horrible thing.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2654 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 12 Jun 2009 15:19:53 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2654 PSC - Yes, this poem was a well written description of enforced detachment from community, and the metaphors only add to meaning. As for beauty, that adds up to construction of the poem and as I said, I did not give it my attention being so taken with the alienation of the situation. PSC – Yes, this poem was a well written description of enforced detachment from community, and the metaphors only add to meaning. As for beauty, that adds up to construction of the poem and as I said, I did not give it my attention being so taken with the alienation of the situation.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2653 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 12 Jun 2009 15:10:25 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2653 Amy - Yes, your comment that the voice of the poem sounds mean is a good observation unless it's the voice's self that is suffering the experience. You must learn to distinguish between the enjoyment of a situation described in a poem, the meaning/experience of the poem which may be enjoyed, uncomfortable or disliked, and the craftsmanship of the poem. As I said in all my comments on the poem, including my first, I was not comparing the poem to other poetry, finer or not. I was completely held by it's experience. Also, try to read carefully. Amy – Yes, your comment that the voice of the poem sounds mean is a good observation unless it’s the voice’s self that is suffering the experience.
You must learn to distinguish between the enjoyment of a situation described in a poem, the meaning/experience of the poem which may be enjoyed, uncomfortable or disliked, and the craftsmanship of the poem. As I said in all my comments on the poem, including my first, I was not comparing the poem to other poetry, finer or not. I was completely held by it’s experience. Also, try to read carefully.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2652 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 12 Jun 2009 14:55:19 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2652 Amy- No of course I don't mean the poem is horrifically written. I meant what it depicts is --"Bleeding until you run dry," "toss them" (the words) into the wind," "never knowing where they may take root" (not knowing one's own people). As I said, I was too horrified by the described situation to concentrate on the lesser concerns of construction, etc., which are usually of great interest to me. In other words, to make it easy for you, I was so grasped by the poem that that the means to it's creation, a description of a horror, was transparent to my experience of it. (An enviable goal to any writer.) Amy- No of course I don’t mean the poem is horrifically written. I meant what it depicts is –”Bleeding until you run dry,” “toss them” (the words) into the wind,” “never knowing where they may take root” (not knowing one’s own people). As I said, I was too horrified by the described situation to concentrate on the lesser concerns of construction, etc., which are usually of great interest to me. In other words, to make it easy for you, I was so grasped by the poem that that the means to it’s creation, a description of a horror, was transparent to my experience of it. (An enviable goal to any writer.)

]]> By: PSC http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2647 PSC Fri, 12 Jun 2009 12:29:12 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2647 Robin & Michelle - Thank you so much! It was exciting to be the Every Day Poet of the day. (My first poem here, and I'm happy to "join" the group! :-) Paul - Being relatively new to the whole submission process, I think a thick skin would be less painful. ;-) Sharon - Too many metaphors, huh? Guess I'd better read the fine print in my poetic license. :-( Thank you rumjhum! I hope you had an inspired and successful day of writing! :-) Thanks everyone! This was fun and exciting -- for me, anyway. ;-) Robin & Michelle – Thank you so much! It was exciting to be the Every Day Poet of the day. (My first poem here, and I’m happy to “join” the group! :-)

Paul – Being relatively new to the whole submission process, I think a thick skin would be less painful. ;-)

Sharon – Too many metaphors, huh? Guess I’d better read the fine print in my poetic license. :-(

Thank you rumjhum! I hope you had an inspired and successful day of writing! :-)

Thanks everyone! This was fun and exciting — for me, anyway. ;-)

]]> By: rumjhum http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/comment-page-1/#comment-2646 rumjhum Fri, 12 Jun 2009 04:23:59 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/johnny-appleseed-by-psc/#comment-2646 Gave it a five. Loved your poem; feels good to read something like this at the start of my writing day (it's now 10 in the morning here in India). :) Gave it a five. Loved your poem; feels good to read something like this at the start of my writing day (it’s now 10 in the morning here in India). :)

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