JUST A KISS • by Amy Corbin

A primal urge
like a newborn’s
need to suckle
or a dried out plant’s
thirst for water
craving a simple thing
leaves me inconsolable
I’ve lost my clothes
and cannot find them
this desire for your kiss
makes the moon
more beautiful
but the stars
feel farther away

Amy Corbin has been published in filling Station, The Cynic, Ascent Aspirations, Shine, Every Day Poets, Every Day Fiction, Haruah: A Breath of Heaven, Ignavia Press,  Flask and Pen,The Battered Suitcase, Flashes in the Dark, Short Story Library, and Smokebox.  She will soon be published in Boston Literary Magazine.  Amy is currently a slush reader at EDP.

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JUST A KISS • by Amy Corbin, 3.3 out of 5 based on 38 ratings
Posted on January 31, 2010 in Literary
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17 Responses to “JUST A KISS • by Amy Corbin”


  1. fishlovesca Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 12:12 am

    The last four lines are superb.

    The rest is cliche.

    Two stars.

  2. Joan Ryder Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 6:09 am

    I think the whole is superb; I can’t agree that most of it is cliche.

  3. Robin Herrnfeld Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 7:55 am

    Beautiful, I like it!

  4. Roberta SchulbergGoro Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 7:56 am

    Emperors have no time for hollywood.

  5. Kathleen Cassen Mickelson Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 8:07 am

    Amy, this is one of my favorites from your lovely body of work.

  6. Roberta SchulbergGoro Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 8:22 am

    Besides, not all stars have Dean Martin ratings.

  7. PSC Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 9:17 am

    I like the whole — but the last 4 lines are the best! ;-)

  8. Amy Corbin Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 9:47 am

    Thanks for all the reads and comments, everyone.;)

  9. fishlovesca Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 10:47 am

    These lines are extraordinary:

    [desire]
    makes the moon
    more beautiful
    but the stars
    feel farther away

  10. Bobby D Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 11:07 am

    You poets get to me everytime. Perfect weaving of words Amy!

  11. Magdalen Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 7:52 pm

    A good poem, I think, and agree with those who love the ending. The last five lines are(IMO)a fine example of poetic sensibility.

  12. Damien Walters Grintalis Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 8:53 pm

    Amy, this is lovely.

  13. Errol Nimbly Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 9:04 pm

    Ah, yes.

    Love it. 5*

  14. vondrakker Says:
    January 31st, 2010 at 9:31 pm

    Simple
    Succinct
    Goes Where??
    # ***

  15. Amy Corbin Says:
    February 1st, 2010 at 4:33 am

    Thanks again for all the comments, everyone.

  16. p.k.n.panicker Says:
    February 2nd, 2010 at 9:59 pm

    Good poem; very expressive.
    Suggestions for few simple changes – please note that these are not corrections
    line 3, omit ‘need’ and insert a comma after suckle
    line 4, omit ‘or’
    line 5, change ‘thing’ to ‘things’ followed with a
    comma
    line 7, omit ‘ have’
    line 8, omit ‘and’ and change ‘ cannot’ to ‘couldn’t’
    line 14, replace ‘feel’ with ‘move’
    My humble suggestions and I personally feel that the above changes will add more force to the poem
    regards -panicker

  17. Roberta SchulbergGoro Says:
    February 3rd, 2010 at 8:34 am

    p.k.n. – I like Amy’s version better. It’s possibly true that it’s an expanding universe, But finding the right clothes will make that seem picayune.

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