Glorious moonfire.
Roof slates alight with blue
silver, true silver
This is a new venture for Nick Bowman who has never been published. He always felt a desire to write but only now has found some time to give it a go.
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May 20th, 2009 at 4:23 am
Very vivid haiku, enjoyed it.
May 20th, 2009 at 7:16 am
Nice image!
May 20th, 2009 at 7:35 am
The first two lines are vivid, an impressive image, but for me, the third line sets the poem down into banality, diminishing “alight with blue.”
May 20th, 2009 at 9:07 am
Must agree with Roberta. That last line pulled the poem down.
May 20th, 2009 at 12:10 pm
I love the image of “moonfire” and that lovely blue silver. Well done.
May 20th, 2009 at 12:51 pm
Lovely imagery.
May 20th, 2009 at 4:23 pm
This isn’t my favourite poetry form – too often the required brevity causes the writer to fall back on cliches. However, in my opinion you pulled this off. Well done!
May 20th, 2009 at 10:24 pm
Vivid. An excellent first.
May 21st, 2009 at 1:59 am
Wonderful – soothing, lovely imagery.
May 21st, 2009 at 7:32 am
Beautiful images, Nick! I, too, liked the blue silver.
May 27th, 2009 at 6:43 am
This is a very nice poem.
June 8th, 2009 at 5:47 am
Hi Nick,
It’s great you are having a go at haiku!
As haiku is such a modern poetry form (haiku as a term and type of poetry came into its own in the early 20th century) do you have a modern or better still, a contemporary book on haiku?
I can recommend Snapshot Press (U.K. based the only haiku press to ever get an award from the Poetry Society of America) as they have collections from U.K. and American authors.
Their book “The New Haiku” is worth considering. If you are from the U.K. then you might like to check out “Wing Beats: British Birds in Haiku” from http://www.wingbeats.co.uk
For an often praised website on introducing haiku you could check out:
http://www.withwords.org.uk/what.html
I still recommend a book about Basho who wrote hokku and renga (as well as other ‘haikai’ forms).
A really good book (although you can’t get it brand new anymore) is:
Essential Poets: Versions of Basho, Buson, and Issa: The Essential Haiku Vol 20 by Robert Hass (Editor)
But you can get it through Abebooks or Amazon second hand.
all my very best,
Alan
July 30th, 2009 at 10:35 pm
I’m going to have to respectfully disagree with Roberta and Paul on this one: I like the repetition of “silver, true silver” in the last line. I think it is that adding of the word “true” that does it for me. You can almost hear the sigh in the poet’s voice.
September 1st, 2009 at 5:59 am
I like the final line, too; to me, it seems to drive home the idea that this silver is more precious than the kind we turn into coins. Nicely done.