Worry about the velvet words
those pretentious sacred verses
spoken with the stumbling tongue
that wags in deceipt.
The well said untruth
with twofold meaning
they are pleasant to the ears
like the soft caress of a song.
Be not mesmerised by the sparkle
of blasphemous lyrics
that can pierce through
your prudent guard.
The smooth chant of verses
that can charm even the wicked.
Lilibeth Taduran writes in Vancouver, Canada.
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Posted on June 28, 2009 in Literary
4 Responses to “SWEET LIES • by Lilibeth Taduran”
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June 28th, 2009 at 3:04 am
I’m afraid that your poem falls into the trap about which it warns, Lilibeth. Too many “the’s” from thee make it sound “pretentious” in a way that I’m sure you didn’t intend.
I also find myself asking “why should I worry?” at the end your poem. Does it surprise you that David wrote great psalms and committed great sins in his very same lifetime? Why is my guard “prudent?”
June 28th, 2009 at 8:18 am
Worry, but don’t be mesmerized. I’m doing that already. Thanks for the reminder and good advice. Sometimes the well-said untruth spoken in deceipt is UNPLEASANT to the hearing, “stumbling tongues” that tear the skein of innocent agreeable truth.
June 28th, 2009 at 9:27 pm
I agree with Dennis that most of the definite articles could be banished, thereby improving the poem.
July 1st, 2009 at 1:06 am
I love this poem. It has its own silver-tongued rhythm and so the words themselves are like a charmer’s speech. Makes it ironic considering the message. Well done. A flourished description of deceit.