TRANQUIL TWILIGHT • by Angel Sharum

Moonlight glimmers caress the water’s surface,
their twinkles signaling me night is near.
As I watch, a gentle breeze rustles
the blanketed forest floor.
The soft sigh of the leaves soothes my senses while
shadows dance through steamy mist
that shrouds the trees,
and blurs the line between sea and shore.

Angel Sharum is a Georgia Peach ripening in Alabama. Putting what friends and family called a vivid and sometimes twisted imagination to use, she began writing poetry and short fiction. Writing short stories allows her to take readers on journeys of imagination that linger beyond “The End”, and poetry offers a way for her to shake up people’s emotions and make them think. According to Angel, if she accomplishes these goals a truly special connection is found between her and her readers.

Posted on June 17, 2009 in Other
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12 Responses to “TRANQUIL TWILIGHT • by Angel Sharum”


  1. Angel Zapata Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 4:17 am

    Lovely conceptional imagery. I’m not sure about, “the blanketed the forest floor.” This line seems to have a word out of place.

  2. Angel Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 9:01 am

    Yes, there is an extra “the” in that sentence. Maybe I can email them and they will take it out.

  3. Sharon Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 10:22 am

    A little clichéd for my taste. Perhaps you can search for images that haven’t already been used too many times.

  4. Paul Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 10:39 am

    I found this poem awkward.

    Even the first line was rolling off the tongue like a log. As an example:

    “Moonlit glimmers caress the water’s surface”

    or

    “Moonlight glimmers, caressing the water’s surface”

    would have been much better.

  5. Angel Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 11:27 am

    Sorry y’all don’t like it. Too each their own.

  6. Camille Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 1:05 pm

    Typo corrected. Sorry about that.

  7. Angel Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 1:11 pm

    Thank you very much. I don’t know if it’s going to help people like the poem any better, but I really appreciate it :)

  8. Rissa Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 1:33 pm

    I loved the imagery of the poem and didn’t think it was cliche at all.

    Why search for some new image when this is the one that touched the poet?

  9. Rose Says:
    June 17th, 2009 at 6:40 pm

    nice one sis :-)

  10. Christie Silvers Says:
    June 18th, 2009 at 9:11 am

    Beautiful poem, Angel. :)

  11. Clarissa Says:
    July 10th, 2009 at 10:10 pm

    Great poem, Angel! I enjoyed it very much! :)

  12. Tasha Says:
    July 27th, 2009 at 4:10 pm

    I like it aunt Angel.

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