Comments on: YELLOW EYES • by Richard H. Fay http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/ Fri, 12 Mar 2010 03:52:54 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Juan http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2871 Juan Wed, 01 Jul 2009 08:24:05 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2871 great cinquain! Full of both assonance and alliteration. Pithy -- a sure sign of success in such a form. great cinquain! Full of both assonance and alliteration. Pithy — a sure sign of success in such a form.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2840 Roberta SchulbergGoro Sun, 28 Jun 2009 15:21:21 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2840 Joan - "feral" means wild. Joan – “feral” means wild.

]]> By: Greg Schwartz http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2834 Greg Schwartz Sun, 28 Jun 2009 03:29:58 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2834 nice one, Richard! nice one, Richard!

]]> By: Joan http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2826 Joan Fri, 26 Jun 2009 22:19:01 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2826 A great image. Powerful, wild, strong..... but it's still the drowsy pussy cat who was lying in the sun on my drive today. Enjoyed! A great image. Powerful, wild, strong….. but it’s still the drowsy pussy cat who was lying in the sun on my drive today. Enjoyed!

]]> By: Sharon http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2825 Sharon Fri, 26 Jun 2009 19:13:20 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2825 I like the pounce, too! Also appreciate how you didn't specify if this was a bobcat or other wild cat--the word "feline" leaves a bit of mystery. I like the pounce, too! Also appreciate how you didn’t specify if this was a bobcat or other wild cat–the word “feline” leaves a bit of mystery.

]]> By: dj barber http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2824 dj barber Fri, 26 Jun 2009 16:08:18 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2824 Very descriptive and well told. --dj Very descriptive and well told.

–dj

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2823 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 26 Jun 2009 12:46:42 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2823 I also like the way the writer put "feline" on a separate line, like a sudden pounce. I also like the way the writer put “feline” on a separate line, like a sudden pounce.

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2822 Roberta SchulbergGoro Fri, 26 Jun 2009 12:42:06 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2822 To me the "f" sound emphasis doesn't match feline - cat. Wouldn't a "feline" offer the spitting sounds of "p, t, s,c"? To me, "wildcat" is closer in sound. I do like "fey," like a fairy's hidden spark, a question in calmness and then the later violent horror. To me the “f” sound emphasis doesn’t match feline – cat. Wouldn’t a “feline” offer the spitting sounds of “p, t, s,c”? To me, “wildcat” is closer in sound. I do like “fey,” like a fairy’s hidden spark, a question in calmness and then the later violent horror.

]]> By: ludmila http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/comment-page-1/#comment-2820 ludmila Fri, 26 Jun 2009 09:33:31 +0000 http://www.everydaypoets.com/yellow-eyes-by-richard-h-fay/#comment-2820 Unusual feeling of danger and beauty comes from your concise poem.I like the title, choice of words. Thanks. Unusual feeling of danger and beauty comes from your concise
poem.I like the title, choice of words. Thanks.

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